不生硬，如果这是个正确的句子的话。mm的语法要好好加强一下了。恕我直言。

You can say:" I'm calling to see if there are any updates regarding this position. Currently, I have got another offer, but I really would love to work for you company. I'd like to know if you think I've got a shot. Thanks!"

另一方面，mm可以给另外那个公司讲你需要和家人商量一下，过三天给他们答复。语气尽量客气一点。